Wednesday, October 14, 2009

Different angles of a FPS?

Many people value different things in life. It can very to just a lowly event, that brought satisfaction to a variety of people, or just something like an expensive objects such as jewelery. I value many different things in life, but there are a simple few things that just give me a feeling of glee. Things just as simple as pulling a good grade out of a test, or just doing well in a certain challenges are things that I value, but there are things that I value immensely.

I quietly open the door, making sure no loud sounds would occur, which would result in the hollering of an angry mother. I hover across the rickety floor and slowly descend onto my couch. I reach over and grab the perfectly shaped controller that fits just right in my hands, and slowly slide the headset over the top of my head. I hold down no the large silver button and kick up my feet as I am about to begin on a joy ride.
I pop in a game disc into the large console with the engraved letters, spelling out Xbox 360, that has been waiting impatiently for my return. A notification alerts all of my other friends that I have returned. I receive a few invitations from a few others, advising me that they would like if I were to join them in playing. I ponder whom should I tag along with, then I decide on who to join. I sink farther into my couch as a wave of relaxation flows over me as I enjoy the experience.
My friends and I ascend into the battlefield, ready for the action. The loud sound of a fragmentation grenade exploding sounds from behind me. I feel shell shock due to it, but shake it off as I trudge along. I mow down one player on the opposing team and quickly take the lead. An alarm sounds off, warning players that there is only a minute left. My character dies a few times more, but ends up re-spawning brand new every time. The battle ends, and my friends let out cheers and begin to boast about how good they did.

I slowly push my goggles back up the bridge of my nose and I crouch down and lightly step through the soft terrain, avoiding branches and other noise causing objects. In my hands I help my brand new m14, gripping tightly onto my the green rubberized ABS plastic and pushing the metal stock hard onto my shoulder. The majority of the gun was composed of iron, including the bolt and the sights, which gave it a more realistic feel. It was electric powered, running on a 9.4 volt battery. It is an average gun all around, but it pulls through whenever I need it.
I kept my head down, and glanced around quickly. Everything was still, almost peaceful, but I knew it couldn't be. I gripped tighter on my m14, having the feeling of paranoia kicking me in the stomach as a kept glancing into the distance. I quickly drop to the ground as a hear the click click of bbs tapping the bark on the tree I was moving next to. I pop my head up and surveyed the area around me and I see a faint figure at the top of the hill. He noticed he had been spotted, but did not retreat. He kept firing in my general direction, thinking I was gonna become impatient and try to fire back from my spot. After he had stopped firing, I revealed myself from my position and fired a well aim shot then hit him directly in the forehead. He shouted loudly then yelled out "hit!" and tossed both his hands into the air, one with a grip on his gun. I grinned to myself. It was my first 'kill' with my new gun, and I knew it was going to leave a mark.

With my Xbox 360, I can get hours of leisurely entertainment, which friends whom I knew in real life, or just people I have met from playing online. In total, it was $200 for the console alone, a range from $20 to $60, then it costs an additional $50 per year, to be able to play online with others. With airsoft, I play with my friends, and we play for fun, as well for bragging rights. I value both these immensely, not because of how much I spent on them, because they are both worth while things to do for me, and will continue to for quite a bit of time.


  1. 1. What the author values in this essay is his Xbox 360 and his first headshot with his M14. Every time he plays his xbox he has fun. The first headshot he got with his M14 was also exciting. These are the moments/things he values.

    2. I thing that the airsoft moment was most vivdly described. I think this is described the best because i can relate to it. I have this whole situation in my head. This is because i play airsoft with Jairo. I think the part where the bb's are hitting the tree speaks to me well.

    3. I think the essay's overall strengths is description. My favorite part is the airsoft battle priceless moment. This is a prime example of great description. The scenario is very well played out in my head.

    4. I think this essay would benefit by making it longer. I like this essay's description but it wouldnt hurt to describe more. This would make both value parts better. Overall this essay is very good. :D

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  3. the author describes what he values. he values playing xbox360 with his friends. he also values his first airsoft kill. he describes both in detail.

    the airsoft section is well described. i can picture you doing those things. the picture in my mind is pretty clear. itmakes you want to be there

    the detail in the story is well done. both situations describe the values clearly. i can picture both things happining. it helps the story flow

    the story could be longer. the detail made me want to know more. i would like to know about the xbox(am i there LOL) and the airsoft. overall, it was very good

  4. The author describes him playing Xbox 360 and him playing air-soft with his friends. He seems to value both of them greatly.
    I would have to agree with PJ in saying that the air-soft section was very vividly describe in the way that you can really picture it in your mind.
    I think that the organization and clarity are two things that excel during this essay. you can read it and it keeps the flow.
    I would Have to agree with PJ once again in saying that that it could be longer in some sections but the detail was there.

  5. 1. Jairo seems to strongly value the time he gets to play Xbox and communicate with his friends. He also values his first Hit in airsoft because to him and who he plays with that's bragging rights. With the xbox jairo has a ritual of sorts when he firsts gets on while in airsoft a headshot is one of the hardest things to pull off. this is why he values them both.

    2.I find that the Xbox is more vividly described in Jairo's essay. Although I know all about airsoft i still get a better picture from his description of his Xbox than when i read about his m14.

    3. One Strength of jairo's essay was the fact that he uses very descriptive words to explain exactly what is going on and exactly how something is happening. This is a major strength in jairo's writing. Along with detail his organization is fairly good as well. Th essay is put together in an easy reading, flowing manner.

    4.One piece of advice I would give Jairo is to use the same detail he used to describe his Xbox in describing his m14. He could also lengthen the essay a little bit to add to the picture already in my mind. I think if he did this and fixed the few spelling errors then jairo would have a great essay.

  6. 1. The author explains how certain items are valuable to some and valueless to others. He values things that make him happy. Two of those things are his Xbox and playing airsoft with his friends.

    2. I found that the description of this xbox was more vividly described. "My friends and I ascend into the battle, ready for the battle. The loud sound of a fragmentation grenade exploding sounds from behind me. I feel shell shock because of it, but shake it off as I trudge along."

    3. I think word choice and writing style are the strengths of this essay. You can really tell the author loves these things and is proud of them.

    4. I agree with the others in that the essay could be longer. Also, I found some spelling mistakes. But overall great essay! :)